I'm one of those who wanted to know, thank you for telling us!
I don't know why you're not quite happy with it but I like it, especially Sherlock stepped a little closer, until he felt John’s warmth through the sleeve of his shirt, where Sherlock shows his vulnerability and his need of comfort wordlessly.
His gaze travelled over John and came to rest on the barely visible scar on his neck. Did you already tell us the story of this scar? I don't remember, you write so much! :D
Maybe you could add a link to this 221B at the end of Cross a bridge when you come to it? The two fics are even better when you read together, to my mind.
Is it me or is something grammatically wrong in "Next to him stood John, a quiet, relaxed presence, and looked out over the Thames to the Tower"? Maybe "who looked out"? Sorry if it's just me! :-)
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Date: 2013-06-16 05:11 pm (UTC)I don't know why you're not quite happy with it but I like it, especially Sherlock stepped a little closer, until he felt John’s warmth through the sleeve of his shirt, where Sherlock shows his vulnerability and his need of comfort wordlessly.
His gaze travelled over John and came to rest on the barely visible scar on his neck.
Did you already tell us the story of this scar? I don't remember, you write so much! :D
Maybe you could add a link to this 221B at the end of Cross a bridge when you come to it? The two fics are even better when you read together, to my mind.
Is it me or is something grammatically wrong in "Next to him stood John, a quiet, relaxed presence, and looked out over the Thames to the Tower"? Maybe "who looked out"? Sorry if it's just me! :-)